Changeset 613be50

Timestamp:

10/05/2022 07:24:31 PM (19 months ago)

Author:

David Bryant <davidbryant@…>

Branches:

11.3, 12.0, 12.1, kea, ken/TL2024, ken/inkscape-core-mods, ken/tuningfonts, lazarus, lxqt, plabs/newcss, plabs/python-mods, python3.11, qt5new, rahul/power-profiles-daemon, renodr/vulkan-addition, trunk, xry111/llvm18, xry111/xf86-video-removal

Children:

e42600e

Parents:

e7f969d

Message:

Polished the prose; eliminated pleonastic verbiage. Eschew the adverb!
Did what I could to make this chapter more interesting. We have a tendency
to use the same word ("part") over and over again. Variety is better.

File:

• introduction/welcome/which.xml (modified) (2 diffs)

introduction/welcome/which.xml

@@ -16 +16 @@
 
   <para>Unlike the Linux From Scratch book, BLFS isn't designed to be
-  followed in a linear manner. This is because LFS provides instructions
-  on how to create a base system which is capable of turning into anything
+  followed in a linear manner. LFS provides instructions
+  on how to create a base system which can become anything
   from a web server to a multimedia desktop system. BLFS attempts
   to guide you in the process of going from the base system to your intended
   destination. Choice is very much involved.</para>
 
-  <para>Everyone who reads the book will want to read certain sections.  The
-  <xref linkend="introduction"/> part, which you are currently reading,
-  contains generic information.  Especially take note of the information in
+  <para>Everyone who reads this book will want to read certain sections.  The
+  <xref linkend="introduction"/>, which you are currently reading,
+  contains generic information.  Take special note of the information in
   <xref linkend="important"/>, as this contains comments about how to
-  unpack software, issues related to using different locales and various other
-  aspects which apply throughout the book.</para>
+  unpack software, issues related to the use of different locales, and various other
+  considerations which apply throughout the book.</para>
 
   <para>The part on <xref linkend="postlfs"/> is where most people will want
-  to turn next.  This deals with not just configuration but also Security
+  to turn next.  This deals not only with configuration, but also with Security
   (<xref linkend="postlfs-security"/>), File Systems (<xref
-  linkend="postlfs-filesystems"/>), Editors (<xref
-  linkend="postlfs-editors"/>) and Shells (<xref linkend="postlfs-shells"/>).
-  Indeed, you may wish to reference certain parts of this chapter (especially
+  linkend="postlfs-filesystems"/> -- including GRUB for UEFI), Editors (<xref
+  linkend="postlfs-editors"/>), and Shells (<xref linkend="postlfs-shells"/>).
+  Indeed, you may wish to reference some parts of this chapter (especially
   the sections on Editors and File Systems) while building your LFS
   system.</para>
 
   <para>Following these basic items, most people will want to at least browse
-  through the <xref linkend="general"/> part of the book.  This part contains
+  through the <xref linkend="general"/> part of the book.  This contains
   information on many items which are prerequisites for other sections of the
-  book as well as some items (such as <xref linkend="general-prog"/>)
-  which are useful in their own right.  Note that you don't have to install all
-  of these libraries and packages found in this part to start with as each
-  BLFS installation procedure tells you which packages
-  it depends upon so you can choose the program you want to install and see
-  what it needs.</para>
+  book, as well as some items (such as <xref linkend="general-prog"/>)
+  which are useful in their own right.  You don't have to install all
+  of the libraries and packages found in this part; each
+  BLFS installation procedure tells you which other packages this one
+  depends upon. You can choose the program you want to install, and see
+  what it needs. (Don't forget to check for nested dependencies!)</para>
 
   <para>Likewise, most people will probably want to look at the
-  <xref linkend="basicnet"/> part.  It deals with connecting to the Internet
+  <xref linkend="basicnet"/> section.  It deals with connecting to the Internet
   or your LAN (<xref linkend="basicnet-connect"/>)
   using a variety of methods such as DHCP and PPP, and with items
-  such as Networking Libraries (<xref linkend="basicnet-netlibs"/>) and various
+  such as Networking Libraries (<xref linkend="basicnet-netlibs"/>), plus various
   basic networking programs and utilities.</para>
 
@@ -59 +59 @@
   linkend="server"/> part of the book.  Those wanting to build servers
   should find a good starting point there.  Note that this section
-  also contains information on various database packages.</para>
+  also contains information on several database packages.</para>
 
-  <para>The next parts of the book principally deal with desktop systems.  This
+  <para>The next twelve chapters deal with desktop systems.  This
   portion of the book starts with a part talking about <xref linkend="x"/>. This
   part also deals with some generic X-based libraries (<xref linkend="x-lib"/>).
-  After this, <xref linkend="kde"/> and <xref linkend="gnome"/> are given their
-  own parts which are followed by one on <xref linkend="xsoft"/>.</para>
+  After that, <xref linkend="kde"/>, <xref linkend="gnome"/>,
+  <xref linkend="xfce"/>, and <xref linkend="lxde"/> are given their
+  own parts, followed by one on <xref linkend="xsoft"/>.</para>
 
   <para>The book then moves on to deal with <xref linkend="multimedia"/>
   packages. Note that many people may want to use the <xref linkend="alsa"/>
-  instructions from this chapter quite near the start of their BLFS
-  journey; they are placed here simply because it is the most logical
+  instructions from this chapter when first starting their BLFS
+  journey; the instructions are placed here because it is the most logical
   place for them.</para>
 
   <para>The final part of the main BLFS book deals with <xref
-  linkend="pst"/>.  This is useful for most people with desktop systems and
-  even those who are creating mainly server systems will find it useful.</para>
+  linkend="pst"/>.  This is useful for most people with desktop systems, but
+  even those who are creating dedicated server systems may find it useful.</para>
 
-  <para>We hope you enjoy using BLFS and find it useful.</para>
+  <para>We hope you enjoy using BLFS. May you realize your dream of building
+  the perfectly personalized Linux system!</para>
 
 </sect1>