Changeset e7f969d

Timestamp:

10/05/2022 05:45:20 PM (19 months ago)

Author:

David Bryant <davidbryant@…>

Branches:

11.3, 12.0, 12.1, kea, ken/TL2024, ken/inkscape-core-mods, ken/tuningfonts, lazarus, lxqt, plabs/newcss, plabs/python-mods, python3.11, qt5new, rahul/power-profiles-daemon, renodr/vulkan-addition, trunk, xry111/llvm18, xry111/xf86-video-removal

Children:

613be50

Parents:

872d8ea8

Message:

Spruced up a rather dull chapter, to give it more pizzazz. Use colorful verbs!

File:

• book/organization.xml (modified) (12 diffs)

book/organization.xml

@@ -16 +16 @@
 
   <para>
-    This book is divided into the following parts.
+    This book is divided into the following fourteen parts.
   </para>
 
@@ -22 +22 @@
 
   <para>
-    This part contains information which is essential to
-    the rest of the book.
+    This part contains essential information which is needed to
+    understand the rest of the book.
   </para>
 
@@ -31 +31 @@
   <para>
     Here we introduce basic configuration and security issues.  We also
-    discuss a range of editors, file systems, and shells which aren't covered
+    discuss a range of text editors, file systems, and shells which aren't covered
     in the main LFS book.
   </para>
@@ -38 +38 @@
 
   <para>
-    In this section we cover libraries which are often needed by the rest
-    of the book as well as system utilities.  Information on Programming
+    In this section we cover libraries which are often needed throughout
+    the book, as well as system utilities.  Information on programming
     (including recompiling <application>GCC</application> to support its full
     range of languages) concludes this part.
@@ -47 +47 @@
 
   <para>
-    Here we cover how to connect to a network when you aren't using the
-    simple static IP setup given in the main LFS book. Networking libraries
+    Here we explain how to connect to a network when you aren't using the
+    simple static IP setup presented in the main LFS book. Networking libraries
     and command-line networking tools are also covered here.
   </para>
@@ -55 +55 @@
 
   <para>
-    Here we deal with setting up mail and other servers (such as
+    Here we show you how to set up mail and other servers (such as
     <application>FTP</application>, <application>Apache</application>, etc.).
   </para>
@@ -63 +63 @@
   <para>
     This part explains how to set up a basic <application>X Window
-    System</application> installation along with some generic
+    System</application>, along with some generic
     <application>X</application> libraries and Window managers.
   </para>
@@ -70 +70 @@
 
   <para>
-    For those who want to use the <application>K Desktop
-    Environment</application> or some parts of it, this part covers it.
+    This part is for those who want to use the <application>K Desktop
+    Environment</application>, or parts of it.
   </para>
 
@@ -95 +95 @@
   </para>
 
-  <bridgehead renderas="sect2">Part XI - X Software</bridgehead>
+  <bridgehead renderas="sect2">Part XI - More X Software</bridgehead>
 
   <para>
     Office programs and graphical web browsers are important to most people.
-    They, along with some generic <application>X</application> software can be
+    They, and some generic <application>X</application> software, can be
     found in this part of the book.
   </para>
@@ -106 +106 @@
 
   <para>
-    Here we cover setting multimedia libraries and drivers along with some
-    audio, video and CD-writing programs.
+    Here we cover multimedia libraries and drivers, along with some
+    audio, video, and CD-writing programs.
   </para>
 
@@ -114 +114 @@
 
   <para>
-    The PST part of the book covers document handling with applications like
-    <application>Ghostscript</application>, <application>CUPS</application> and
-    <application>DocBook</application> to installing
+    This part covers document handling, from applications like
+    <application>Ghostscript</application>, <application>CUPS</application>, and
+    <application>DocBook</application>, all the way to
     <application>texlive</application>.
   </para>
@@ -123 +123 @@
 
   <para>
-    The Appendices cover information which doesn't belong in the main
-    book; they are mainly there as a reference.
+    The Appendices present information which doesn't belong in the body of
+    book; they are included as reference material. The glossary of acronyms
+    is a handy feature.
   </para>