Index: chapter02/creatingfilesystem.xml
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+++ chapter02/creatingfilesystem.xml	(revision 9a207c4bdacad6b6b37f0e8fb383e1e034d38003)
@@ -5,24 +5,27 @@
 ]>
 <sect1 id="space-creatingfilesystem">
-<title>Creating a file system</title>
+<title>Creating a File System on the New Partition</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="creatingfilesystem.html"?>
 
-<para>Now that we have a blank partition, we can create a file system on it.
-Most widely used in the Linux world is the second extended file system (ext2),
-but with the high-capacity hard disks of today the so-called journaling file
-systems are becoming increasingly popular. Here we will create an ext2 file
-system, but build instructions for other file systems can be found at 
-<ulink url="&blfs-root;view/stable/postlfs/filesystems.html"/>.</para>
+<para>Now that a blank partition has been set up, the file system can
+be created. The most widely-used system in the Linux world is the
+<systemitem class="filesystem">second extended file
+system</systemitem> (ext2), but with the newer high-capacity hard
+disks, the journaling file systems are becoming increasingly popular.
+Here we will create an ext2 file system, but build instructions for
+other file systems can be found at <ulink
+url="&blfs-root;view/stable/postlfs/filesystems.html"/>.</para>
 
-<para>To create an ext2 file system on the LFS partition run the following:</para>
+<para>To create an ext2 file system on the LFS partition, run the following:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>mke2fs /dev/<replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable></userinput></screen>
 
-<para>Replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> with the name of the LFS partition
-(something like <filename>hda5</filename>).</para>
+<para>Replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> with the name of the LFS
+partition (<filename>hda5</filename> in our previous example).</para>
 
-<para>If you created a (new) swap partition you need to initialize it as a
-swap partition too (also known as formatting, like you did above with
-<command>mke2fs</command>) by running:</para>
+<para>If a swap partition was created, it will need to be initialized
+as a swap partition too (also known as formatting, as described above
+with mke2fs) by running the following. If you are using an existing
+swap parition you do not need to format it.</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>mkswap /dev/<replaceable>[yyy]</replaceable></userinput></screen>
@@ -32,2 +35,3 @@
 
 </sect1>
+
Index: chapter02/creatingpartition.xml
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--- chapter02/creatingpartition.xml	(revision 6e354380073a2249e16ed79a165cbafbc2049803)
+++ chapter02/creatingpartition.xml	(revision 9a207c4bdacad6b6b37f0e8fb383e1e034d38003)
@@ -5,40 +5,49 @@
 ]>
 <sect1 id="space-creatingpartition">
-<title>Creating a new partition</title>
+<title>Creating a New Partition</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="creatingpartition.html"?>
 
-<para>In order to build our new Linux system, we will need some space:
-an empty disk partition. If you don't have a free partition, and no room
-on any of your hard disks to make one, then you could build LFS on the
-same partition as the one on which your current distribution is installed.
-This procedure is not recommended for your first LFS install, but if you
-are short on disk space, and you feel brave, take a look at the hint at
-<ulink url="&hints-root;lfs_next_to_existing_systems.txt"/>.</para>
+<para>In order to build a new Linux system, space is required -- an
+empty disk partition. If the computer does not have a free partition
+or room on any of the hard disks to make one, LFS can be built on the
+same partition where the current distribution is installed.</para>
 
-<para>For a minimal system you will need a partition of around 1.3 GB.
-This is enough to store all the source tarballs and compile all the packages.
-But if you intend to use the LFS system as your primary Linux system, you
-will probably want to install additional software, and will need more space
-than this, probably around 2 or 3 GB.</para>
+<note><para>This procedure is not recommended for your first LFS
+install, but if you are short on disk space and feel brave, you can
+use the hint at <ulink
+url="&hints-root;lfs_next_to_existing_systems.txt"/>.</para></note>
 
-<para>As we almost never have enough RAM in our box, it is a good idea to
-use a small disk partition as swap space -- this space is used by the kernel
-to store seldom-used data to make room in memory for more urgent stuff.
-The swap partition for your LFS system can be the same one as for your host
-system, so you won't have to create another if your host system already uses
-a swap partition.</para>
+<para>A minimal system requires a partition of around 1.3 gigabytes
+(GB).  This is enough to store all the source tarballs and compile all
+the packages. However, if the LFS system is intended to be the primary
+Linux system, additional software will probably be installed which
+will require additional space (2 or 3 GB). The LFS system itself will
+not take up this much space. A large portion of this required amount
+of space is to provide sufficient free temporary space. Compiling
+packages can require a lot of disk space which will be reclaimed after
+the package is installed, but you do need it temporarily.</para>
 
-<para>Start a disk partitioning program such as <command>cfdisk</command>
-or <command>fdisk</command> with an argument naming the hard disk upon
-which the new partition must be created -- for example
-<filename>/dev/hda</filename> for the primary IDE disk. Create a Linux native
-partition and a swap partition, if needed. Please refer to the man pages of
-<command>cfdisk</command> or <command>fdisk</command> if you don't yet
-know how to use the programs.</para>
+<para>Because there is rarely enough RAM available for the process, it
+is a good idea to use a small disk partition as swap space.  This
+space is used by the kernel to store seldom-used data to make room in
+memory for active processes. The swap partition for an LFS system can
+be the same as the your host system, so another swap partition will
+not need to be created if your host system already uses one.</para>
 
-<para>Remember the designation of your new partition -- something like
-<filename>hda5</filename>. This book will refer to it as the LFS partition.
-If you (now) also have a swap partition, remember its designation too. These
-names will later be needed for the <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> file.</para>
+<para>Start a disk partitioning program such as
+<command>cfdisk</command> or <command>fdisk</command> with an command
+line option naming the hard disk on which the new partition will be
+created -- for example <filename>/dev/hda</filename> for the primary
+Integrated Drive Electronics (IDE) disk. Create a Linux native
+partition and a swap partition, if needed. Please refer to the man
+pages of <command>cfdisk</command> or <command>fdisk</command> if you
+do not yet know how to use the programs.</para>
+
+<para>Remember the designation of the new partition (e.g.,
+<filename>hda5</filename>). This book will refer to this as the LFS
+partition. Also remember the designation of the swap partition. These
+names will be needed later for the <filename>/etc/fstab</filename>
+file.</para>
 
 </sect1>
+
Index: chapter02/introduction.xml
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--- chapter02/introduction.xml	(revision 6e354380073a2249e16ed79a165cbafbc2049803)
+++ chapter02/introduction.xml	(revision 9a207c4bdacad6b6b37f0e8fb383e1e034d38003)
@@ -8,7 +8,8 @@
 <?dbhtml filename="introduction.html"?>
 
-<para>In this chapter the partition which will host the LFS system is
-prepared. We will create the partition itself, make a file system on it,
-and mount it.</para>
+<para>In this chapter, the partition which will host the LFS system is
+prepared. We will create the partition itself, create a file system
+on it, and mount it.</para>
 
 </sect1>
+
Index: chapter02/mounting.xml
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--- chapter02/mounting.xml	(revision 6e354380073a2249e16ed79a165cbafbc2049803)
+++ chapter02/mounting.xml	(revision 9a207c4bdacad6b6b37f0e8fb383e1e034d38003)
@@ -5,19 +5,21 @@
 ]>
 <sect1 id="space-mounting">
-<title>Mounting the new partition</title>
+<title>Mounting the New Partition</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="mounting.html"?>
 
-<para>Now that we've created a file system, we want to be able to access
-the partition. For that, we need to mount it, and have to choose a mount
-point. In this book we assume that the file system is mounted under
-<filename class="directory">/mnt/lfs</filename>, but it doesn't matter what directory
-you choose.</para>
+<para>Now that a file system has been created, the partition needs to
+be made accessible. In order to do this, the partition needs to be
+mounted at a chosen mount point. For the purposes of this book, it is
+assumed that the file system is mounted under <filename
+class="directory">/mnt/lfs</filename>, but the directory choice is up
+to you.</para>
 
-<para>Choose a mount point and assign it to the LFS environment variable
-by running:</para>
+<para>Choose a mount point and assign it to the LFS environment
+variable by running:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>export LFS=/mnt/lfs</userinput></screen>
 
-<para>Now create the mount point and mount the LFS file system by running:</para>
+<para>Next, create the mount point and mount the LFS file system by
+running:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>mkdir -p $LFS
@@ -27,7 +29,7 @@
 partition.</para>
 
-<para>If you have decided to use multiple partitions for LFS (say one for
-<filename class="directory">/</filename> and another for 
-<filename class="directory">/usr</filename>), mount them like this:</para>
+<para>If using multiple partitions for LFS (e.g., one for <filename
+class="directory">/</filename> and another for <filename
+class="directory">/usr</filename>), mount them using:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>mkdir -p $LFS
@@ -36,15 +38,19 @@
 mount /dev/<replaceable>[yyy]</replaceable> $LFS/usr</userinput></screen>
 
-<para>Of course, replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> and
-<replaceable>[yyy]</replaceable> with the appropriate partition names.</para>
+<para>Replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> and
+<replaceable>[yyy]</replaceable> with the appropriate partition
+names.</para>
 
-<para>You should also ensure that this new partition is not mounted with
-permissions that are too restrictive (such as the nosuid, nodev or noatime
-options). You can run the <command>mount</command> command without any
-parameters to see with what options the LFS partition is mounted. If
-you see nosuid, nodev or noatime, you will need to remount it.</para>
- 
-<para>Now that we've made ourselves a place to work in, we're ready to download
-the packages.</para>
+<para>Ensure that this new partition is not mounted with permissions
+that are too restrictive (such as the nosuid, nodev, or noatime
+options). Run the <command>mount</command> command without any
+parameters to see with what options are set for the mounted LFS
+partition. If <emphasis>nosuid</emphasis>, <emphasis>nodev</emphasis>,
+and/or <emphasis>noatime</emphasis> are set, the partition will need
+to be remounted.</para>
+
+<para>Now that there is an established place to work, it's time to
+download the packages.</para>
 
 </sect1>
+
