Changeset e0ae8cb

Timestamp:

10/15/2022 05:26:28 PM (18 months ago)

Author:

David Bryant <davidbryant@…>

Branches:

11.3, 11.3-rc1, 12.0, 12.0-rc1, 12.1, 12.1-rc1, bdubbs/gcc13, multilib, renodr/libudev-from-systemd, trunk, xry111/arm64, xry111/arm64-12.0, xry111/clfs-ng, xry111/loongarch, xry111/loongarch-12.0, xry111/loongarch-12.1, xry111/mips64el, xry111/pip3, xry111/update-glibc

Children:

7739ad3

Parents:

efae039

Message:

Improved English idiom and puctuation. Short, punchy sentences are good!

File:

• prologue/audience.xml (modified) (3 diffs)

prologue/audience.xml

@@ -19 +19 @@
 how a Linux system works from the inside out. Building an LFS system helps
 demonstrate what makes Linux tick, and how things work together and depend on
-each other. One of the best things that this learning experience can provide is
+each other. One of the best things this learning experience can provide is
 the ability to customize a Linux system to suit your own unique needs.</para>
 
-<para>Another key benefit of LFS is that it allows you to have more control
-over the system without relying on someone else's Linux implementation. With
-LFS, you are in the driver's seat and dictate every aspect of the
+<para>Another key benefit of LFS is that it gives you control
+of the system without relying on someone else's Linux implementation. With
+LFS, you are in the driver's seat. <emphasis>You</emphasis> dictate every aspect of your
 system.</para>
 
-<para>LFS allows you to create very compact Linux systems. When installing
-regular distributions, you are often forced to install a great many
-programs which are probably never used or understood. These programs waste
-resources. You may argue that with today's hard drive and CPUs, such
+<para>LFS allows you to create very compact Linux systems. With
+other distributions you are often forced to install a great many
+programs you neither use nor understand. These programs waste
+resources. You may argue that with today's hard drives and CPUs, wasted
 resources are no longer a consideration. Sometimes, however, you are still
-constrained by size considerations if nothing else. Think about bootable
+constrained by the system's size, if nothing else. Think about bootable
 CDs, USB sticks, and embedded systems. Those are areas where LFS can be
 beneficial.</para>
@@ -38 +38 @@
 <para>Another advantage of a custom built Linux system is security. By compiling
 the entire system from source code, you are empowered to audit everything
-and apply all the security patches desired. It is no longer necessary to
+and apply all the security patches you want. You don't have to
 wait for somebody else to compile binary packages that fix a security hole.
 Unless you examine the patch and implement it yourself, you have no
@@ -49 +49 @@
 book.</para>
 
-<para>There are too many other good reasons to build your own LFS system to
-list them all here. In the end, education is by far the most powerful of
-reasons. As you continue in your LFS experience, you will discover the power
-that information and knowledge truly bring.</para>
+<para>There are too many good reasons to build your own LFS system to
+list them all here. In the end, education is by far the most important
+reason. As you continue your LFS experience, you will discover the power
+that information and knowledge can bring.</para>
 
 </sect1>