Opened 15 years ago

Closed 15 years ago

#2326 closed task (fixed)

Modifications to Preface

Reported by: gerard@… Owned by: gerard@…
Priority: normal Milestone: 6.5
Component: Book Version: SVN
Severity: minor Keywords:
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Description

The Foreword, Audience and Prerequisites section could use a re-edit. Some of it is linked with issues outlined in Trac ticket #2092 (switching back from 3rd person to 2nd person pronouns).

Change History (9)

comment:1 by Matthew Burgess, 15 years ago

Milestone: 7.0
Severity: normalminor

comment:2 by bdubbs@…, 15 years ago

IN looking at this ticket, the only change I see needed in the Foreword is the 5th paragraph:

This Linux From Scratch book provides readers you with the background and instruction to design and build your own custom Linux systems. This book highlights the Linux from Scratch project and the benefits of using this system. Users You can dictate all aspects of their your system, including directory layout, script setup, and security. The resulting system will be compiled completely from the source code, and the user you will be able to specify where, why, and how programs are installed. This book allows readers you to fully customize Linux systems to their your own needs and allows users you more control over their your system.

That said, I think this page in particular needs to be updated by Gerard.

comment:3 by bdubbs@…, 15 years ago

Milestone: 7.06.5

comment:4 by gerard@…, 15 years ago

Owner: changed from lfs-book@… to gerard@…
Status: newassigned

comment:5 by gerard@…, 15 years ago

First draft of replacement version was just committed.

comment:6 by bdubbs@…, 15 years ago

This paragraph seems awkward:

After sorting through issues such as circular dependencies and compile-time errors, a custom-built Linux system was finally built. It was fully operational and perfectly usable like any of the other Linux systems out there at the time. But it was my own creation. It was very satisfying to have put together such a system yourself. The only thing better would have been to create each piece of software yourself. This was the next best thing.

I suggest s/yourself/myself/

comment:7 by bdubbs@…, 15 years ago

Also:

It provides the background and instructions necessary for you to design and build your own system. While this book provides a template that will result in a correctly working system, you are free to alter the instructions to suit yourself . that is the whole point of the project after all. You remain in control; we just lend a helping hand to get you started on your own journey.

There is an extra space after yourself and 'that' should be capitalized.

comment:8 by gerard@…, 15 years ago

First draft of new Audience section. Shortened it a bit, still needs a lot of work so it flows better.

comment:9 by gerard@…, 15 years ago

Resolution: fixed
Status: assignedclosed
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