Changeset ec7b0466 for chapter04/addinguser.xml

Timestamp:

09/27/2022 06:07:58 PM (2 years ago)

Author:

David Bryant <davidbryant@…>

Branches:

11.3, 11.3-rc1, 12.0, 12.0-rc1, 12.1, 12.1-rc1, 12.2, 12.2-rc1, bdubbs/gcc13, multilib, renodr/libudev-from-systemd, trunk, xry111/arm64, xry111/arm64-12.0, xry111/clfs-ng, xry111/loongarch, xry111/loongarch-12.0, xry111/loongarch-12.1, xry111/loongarch-12.2, xry111/mips64el, xry111/multilib, xry111/pip3, xry111/rust-wip-20221008, xry111/update-glibc

Children:

ef93b66

Parents:

2646c57

Message:

Tweaked English idiom / clarified directiions in chapters 4.3 and 4.4.

File:

• chapter04/addinguser.xml (modified) (7 diffs)

chapter04/addinguser.xml

@@ -15 +15 @@
   the packages in the next two chapters are built as an unprivileged user.
   You could use your own user name, but to make it easier to set up a clean
-  working environment, create a new user called <systemitem
+  working environment, we will create a new user called <systemitem
   class="username">lfs</systemitem> as a member of a new group (also named
-  <systemitem class="groupname">lfs</systemitem>) and use this user during
+  <systemitem class="groupname">lfs</systemitem>) and log in as this user during
   the installation process. As <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>,
   issue the following commands to add the new user:</para>
@@ -25 +25 @@
 
   <variablelist>
-    <title>The meaning of the command line options:</title>
+    <title>This is what the command line options mean:</title>
 
     <varlistentry>
@@ -55 +55 @@
       <listitem>
         <para>This parameter prevents possible copying of files from a skeleton
-        directory (default is <filename class="directory">/etc/skel</filename>)
+        directory (the default is <filename class="directory">/etc/skel</filename>)
         by changing the input location to the special null device.</para>
       </listitem>
@@ -69 +69 @@
   </variablelist>
 
-  <para>To log in as <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> (as opposed
+  <para>To enable logging in as <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> (as opposed
   to switching to user <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> when logged
   in as <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>, which does not require
@@ -78 +78 @@
 
   <para>Grant <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> full access to
-  all directories under <filename class="directory">$LFS</filename> by making
-  <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> the directory owner:</para>
+  all the directories under <filename class="directory">$LFS</filename> by making
+  <systemitem class="username">lfs</systemitem> the owner:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>chown -v lfs $LFS/{usr{,/*},lib,var,etc,bin,sbin,tools}
@@ -86 +86 @@
 esac</userinput></screen>
 
-  <note><para>In some host systems, the following command does not complete
-  properly and suspends the login to the &lfs-user; user to the background.
+<note><para>In some host systems, the following <command>su</command> command does not complete
+  properly and suspends the login for the &lfs-user; user to the background.
   If the prompt "lfs:~$" does not appear immediately, entering the
   <command>fg</command> command will fix the issue.</para></note>
@@ -99 +99 @@
   <para>The <quote><parameter>-</parameter></quote> instructs
   <command>su</command> to start a login shell as opposed to a non-login shell.
-  The difference between these two types of shells can be found in detail in
+  The difference between these two types of shells is described in detail in
   <filename>bash(1)</filename> and <command>info bash</command>.</para>