Changeset cff800e for chapter01/how.xml

Timestamp:

05/24/2009 05:06:05 PM (15 years ago)

Author:

Gerard Beekmans <gerard@…>

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Children:

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Parents:

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Message:

Various edits, some addressing #2092 and #2326.

git-svn-id: ​http://svn.linuxfromscratch.org/LFS/trunk/BOOK@8914 4aa44e1e-78dd-0310-a6d2-fbcd4c07a689

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• chapter01/how.xml (modified) (7 diffs)

chapter01/how.xml

@@ -11 +11 @@
   <title>How to Build an LFS System</title>
 
-  <para>The LFS system will be built by using a previously installed
+  <para>The LFS system will be built by using an already installed
   Linux distribution (such as Debian, Mandriva, Red Hat, or SUSE). This
   existing Linux system (the host) will be used as a starting point to
@@ -44 +44 @@
   discusses the setup of an appropriate working environment. Please read
   <xref linkend="chapter-final-preps"/> carefully as it explains several
-  important issues the reader should be aware of before beginning to
-  work through <xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/> and beyond.</para>
+  important issues you need be aware of before beginning to
+  work your way through <xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/> and beyond.</para>
 
   <para><xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/> explains the
@@ -54 +54 @@
   to compile a compiler, you need a compiler.</para>
 
-  <para><xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/> also shows the user how to
+  <para><xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/> also shows you how to
   build a first pass of the toolchain, including Binutils and GCC (first pass
   basically means these two core packages will be reinstalled).
@@ -67 +67 @@
 
   <para>This effort to isolate the new system from the host distribution may
-  seem excessive, but a full technical explanation is provided in
+  seem excessive. A full technical explanation as to why this is done is provided in
   <xref linkend="ch-tools-toolchaintechnotes"/>.</para>
 
@@ -77 +77 @@
   does not actually reboot, but instead <command>chroot</command>'s because
   creating a bootable system requires additional work which is not necessary
-  just yet. The major advantage is that <quote>chrooting</quote> allows the
-  builder to continue using the host while LFS is being built. While waiting
-  for package compilation to complete, a user can switch to a different
-  virtual console (VC) or X desktop and continue using the computer as
+  just yet. The major advantage is that <quote>chrooting</quote> allows you
+  to continue using the host system while LFS is being built. While waiting
+  for package compilations to complete, you can continue using your computer as
   normal.</para>
 
@@ -86 +85 @@
   <xref linkend="chapter-bootscripts"/>, and the kernel and boot loader are set
   up in <xref linkend="chapter-bootable"/>. <xref linkend="chapter-finalizing"/>
-  contains information on furthering the LFS experience beyond this book.
+  contains information on continuing the LFS experience beyond this book.
   After the steps in this book have been implemented, the computer will be
   ready to reboot into the new LFS system.</para>
@@ -93 +92 @@
   step is discussed in the following chapters and package descriptions.
   Items that may seem complicated will be clarified, and everything will
-  fall into place as the reader embarks on the LFS adventure.</para>
+  fall into place as you embark on the LFS adventure.</para>
 
 </sect1>